A Commentary on a Special Fall Poem

Love from above

Twirling around, look at the spinning stars

You inhaled too much of the universe

this time around.

Grab my hands in yours and spin, spin, spin

Never notice my feet giving in

Until I’m down on the ground again

Maybe, 

they won’t give in this time.

If anyone could suspend time it would be you

You could keep us here forever in this moment

Couldn’t you?

I believe so highly in your expansiveness

The freckles that lightly mist your nose

Are no accident;

They are stars which have decided you are more beautiful than the sky

I pick grass out of your hair

And wish we could always be this high

Feel this wonder

You could reach straight into my chest right now and pull out my whole soul

When we kiss,

I know something shifted, universally.

We are expansive and effortless

We are changing the very plates that move beneath us

The very gravity that holds us down

When everyone floats up to the sky one day

They can blame us.

And we’ll still be here

In this moment

Holding each other like we’ve found the thing that completes all our

wonders. 

I wrote this poem at the end of summer last year, and it represents the changing of seasons for me. This poem is about being unsure about the love you feel for someone else because love is such a delicate thing. It’s also about the power that happens when you feel so connected to another person that the other world drifts away. At the start of the poem, I implemented a hyperbolic metaphor to show the intensity of the relationship in the moment. When writing poetry, making a container for the time and place makes it better able to be understood by the audience. The use of the word “maybe” as a singular line suggests the intricate delicacy of new love, the start of something where maybe’s are all one thinks. The next stanza just delineates what it’s like to put someone on a pedestal when you’re falling in love. I personified the stars to make it seem like this one person contains an entire universe. Lastly, I ended with an expansion of the first thought and showed the expansiveness of the singular person moving into both of these characters. The characters are now connected because of this night and the use of “we” shows the power they both feel in their connection. They both feel the universe is rearranging for them this time around.